i didn't get the point of the poem, really, except for the end. then again i'm multitasking the the maximum.... but i loved all your references to color, which relate so well to nature, hiking, etc. it all ties in. all in all - beautiful imagery. and the ending...wow. great. it made you think =]
my favorite reference to color:
glistening flame-tangerine shriek
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Meh... I never knew somebody who could describe a winter hike such as this as to make me want to take one.
Although I probabaly wouldn't take cheese on my hikes, I liked this poem all the same.
Every poet needs reaffirmation, sometimes. :)